I was surprised to learn that this was your first foray in the XMMFF realm because you captured the essence of the trio's personalities so well. While John and Bobby faithful to their respective leaders may seem a no brainer (since the movies basically set them up that way), your treatment was balanced and eloquent. John's loyalty to Magneto was especially touching, because that was the one thing that was keeping him going. When they find the body, the description of him and what was left of the X-Men was powerful and John's reaction was very much in character.
The pace you set for developing the characters was great, especially the "truth or dare" scene. The simple The next night they play again, and this time John and Bobby do more than kiss. Marie watches then, too. contains so much in it, how far they have developed, the boundaries they set up and breakdown as they adapt.
That leads into the issue of John and Bobby's friendship. Them slugging it out and coming to a stalemate is a great scene. Bobby being scandalized by John's confessionals about him is fun to read.
The Rogue/Logan issue was handled brilliantly. Bobby's awareness of just where he stood was a nice counter to his embarrassment and naivete about almost everything else. When Marie receives the note in the Mansion and she makes her decision, it was an excellent closure.
Finally, I love the progression of names. Marie doesn't think of herself as Rogue gives a great insight to her, especially her hesitation about her powers. Pyro becoming John as the story unfolds is a wonderful way to show how he has changed.
And Bobby? Well, he's wonderfully always Bobby.
Bravo for an excellent story. I hope you consider writing this trio again.
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Date: 2007-08-04 06:39 pm (UTC)I was surprised to learn that this was your first foray in the XMMFF realm because you captured the essence of the trio's personalities so well. While John and Bobby faithful to their respective leaders may seem a no brainer (since the movies basically set them up that way), your treatment was balanced and eloquent. John's loyalty to Magneto was especially touching, because that was the one thing that was keeping him going. When they find the body, the description of him and what was left of the X-Men was powerful and John's reaction was very much in character.
The pace you set for developing the characters was great, especially the "truth or dare" scene. The simple The next night they play again, and this time John and Bobby do more than kiss. Marie watches then, too. contains so much in it, how far they have developed, the boundaries they set up and breakdown as they adapt.
That leads into the issue of John and Bobby's friendship. Them slugging it out and coming to a stalemate is a great scene. Bobby being scandalized by John's confessionals about him is fun to read.
The Rogue/Logan issue was handled brilliantly. Bobby's awareness of just where he stood was a nice counter to his embarrassment and naivete about almost everything else. When Marie receives the note in the Mansion and she makes her decision, it was an excellent closure.
Finally, I love the progression of names. Marie doesn't think of herself as Rogue gives a great insight to her, especially her hesitation about her powers. Pyro becoming John as the story unfolds is a wonderful way to show how he has changed.
And Bobby? Well, he's wonderfully always Bobby.
Bravo for an excellent story. I hope you consider writing this trio again.